Trying something new this week. Used the silly photo below as inspiration to create a short story. Hope you enjoy it.
Lottie and Clara didn’t like the looks of the new neighbor. He must have moved in late one night when no one was looking because suddenly, on the third Tuesday in May, there he was peering up at the sky, long slim fingers shading his dark eyes from the glare. As if that wasn’t strange enough, ever since he’d arrived Clara had a melody playing inside her head that just wouldn’t quit. All day and all night a string of familiar notes rang in her ears. She couldn’t place it and she couldn’t get it to stop. No way to prove it was his fault of course, but the only alternative she could think of involved Clara losing her marbles.
Also, there was Lottie’s obsession with the new neighbor’s feet.
A drought had hit the town the likes of which Clara had never seen before. Flowers once spanned the block blooming with lush abandon. But now the sun scorched everything leaving little behind. The bruised roots running deep beneath the soil gasped for breath waiting for the rain that never came. If you listened hard you could hear their cries everywhere, in Fran Crosby’s wilted rose garden, in the parched skin of Ben Slovak’s oak tree. Clara had to blow her nose in a hanky every time she caught the sound wailing through the wind.
Despite the heat, Lottie insisted on gardening. She’d even sent away special for drought resistant bulbs. Clara told her she’d been duped. But she kept at it, the dizzy old broad. One day, as Lottie dropped bulbs in the dusty earth the new neighbor strolled over, barefoot of all things. He paused in front of her tapping his naked beast of a foot, discoloration under the nails and a tiny tuft of wiry hair curling up on the big toe. Clara kept a close eye on him from her chair in the shade.
The gentleman patted his stomach. “Ladies, I’ve ingested something with difficulty and I’m feeling a bit queasy. Might I trouble you for some bicarbonate?”
He spoke like a man unaccustomed to hearing words come out of his mouth. Clara went in and fetched the tin. When he offered to bring it back, she shook her head. “Nah, you keep it,” she said, wary of a return visit.
“They were green , I tell ya,” Lottie said weeks later. “Rotted green flesh. Decayed under the nail. Gave me the willies.” The old woman shuddered, wrapping the shawl tighter around her shoulders.
“Lottie, I swear, one more word about that man’s feet and I will dump this bottle of sherry on your head,” Clara said, wondering if she could drive out to see a specialist about the sound in her ears without anyone noticing.
Their unwelcome visitor started leaving small clay pots out on his lawn. Clara peeked into one of them. Shriveled brown blossoms floated along the surface of a murky green fluid. She gave the pot a nudge with her foot. A suspicious bundle tied with twine bobbed to the surface. What kinda witch doctoring was this fella up to? She leaned in to get a closer look.
“What do you think has caused this unfortunate blight?” the man said appearing out of nowhere.
“The drought, you mean?” Clara said, attempting to look innocent of poking her nose where it didn’t belong. “The way I see it, we stopped thinking about the world, and the world stopped thinking about us. But what do I know? I’m just an old lady with more opinions than teeth.”
“Excessive age can be a benefit,” he said grabbing a fistful of dirt and rubbing it between his fingertips.
Excessive age? He was one to talk. Clara glanced down at her hands now littered with brown spots. She’d played the piano in her youth. Pretty good at it, some said. But life got noisy and she stopped playing. Now, she wasn’t fit to perform chopsticks.
“But surely the land sustains itself without human attention?” he said.
“I don’t know. Sometimes things just can’t find their way back,” Clara said smoothing out the flesh on the back of her wrinkled hands. “Is that why you’re here, about the drought? Or, do you have some other business in town?” She looked up but the man had already wandered back into his house, leaving her unanswered questions trailing behind.
A few days later the melody continued to push on the back of Clara’s eyes. Why couldn’t she remember it? She was going crackers for sure. Suddenly, Lottie flung open the kitchen door. “You are not going to believe this,” she said, trying to catch her breath. “Clara, we are living next door to a tulip-eating madman with green toes.”
“What are you talking about?” Clara said.
Lottie’s hands trembled as she poured herself some sherry, draining the glass. Apparently on her way back from buying foot powder in town their new neighbor suddenly stumbled out his backdoor practically falling into Lottie’s arms, and coughing. “Not any ordinary kind of coughing, either,” Lottie said. “Remember Breezy Carlson’s cat? The one with the hairball? It was that kinda noise, only deeper and more raspy.”
Clara gave Lottie that look. The one that said, is this going to be one of your stories where you take twenty minutes to tell me all sorts of stuff I don’t need to hear?
Lottie ignored her, continuing to describe this historic coughing fit until she finally ambled over to her point. “So he gives one final shudder then it flies out of his mouth and lands right in front of my feet.”
“What does?” Clara said wrinkling up her nose.
“A perfectly formed yellow tulip blossom.”
“You’re pulling my leg, right?”
“Hand to god Clara, hand to god,” Lottie said. “This explains why my flowers haven’t sprouted.”
Clara rubbed her aching temples. “The only thing stopping those tulips from growing is the damned drought.”
There was an insistent knocking at the kitchen door. “Madam, please,” the man’s muffled voice said. “Let me in.”
Lottie opened the door and glared at their neighbor the-tulip-snatcher. “I know what I saw, I’m on to you Mister.”
“Your imagination has gotten the better of you, I’m afraid,” he said, walking into the kitchen.
Clara put her head in her hands and tried to concentrate.
“The minute I saw those green feet of yours, I knew you were trouble,” Lottie said.
“It’s just a fungus, I assure you,” he said.
“I have a mind to talk to the town council about you,” Lottie said.
“Sonata in G Major!” Clara shouted jumping up from the table and knocking over her chair.
“Have you gone insane?” Lottie said.
“Probably,” Clara said. “But it’s still Scarlatti’s Sonata in G Major.”
The visitor from next door stared at her, his eyes unblinking. All the windows in the house suddenly rattled.
“Was that?” Lottie said.
“Thunder?” Clara said.
Another rumble, larger this time, followed by the once-familiar flash of–
“Lightening!” Lottie shouted, running to the window and yanking open the curtains. Clara’s eyes remained pinned to the man standing in her kitchen. A small smile twitched across his lips. “Come on!” Lottie said, dragging her out the door and into the yard.
The storm clouds throbbed, expectant. Just a staccato sprinkling at first, but then the rumbles grew into a crescendo of big fat glorious raindrops. Clara closed her eyes, smiling. Deep in the earth the sweet sound of joyous plants rang out. As she spun round arms outstretched, Clara’s wet grey curls clung to her cheeks. She didn’t care that her best friend drank too much sherry and planted bulbs in the middle of Sahara-heat, or that the man next door had green toes and coughed up tulips, or that she was probably coming off her spool; it was raining, and the plants were humming a Sonata in G Major, and that was all that mattered.
The next few days buzzed with activity. The rain had brought relief to the whole town. When her tulips began sprouting Lottie paraded around like a proud peacock. She decided to report the news to their neighbor and let him off the hook. But he had disappeared.
Ben Slovak, who sold real estate in town, came by to admire the tulips. When the ladies asked Ben what had happened to the man next door, he seemed confused.
“Oh, you know, Mr. Whatshisname,” Lottie said. “Tall man, redhead, about forty-five?”
“No,” Clara said, giving her a look. “His hair was silver and he was about seventy.” Ben had no idea what either woman was talking about The heat had kept the renters away for months.
Later that afternoon Clara noticed a tin of bicarbonate sitting on the piano. Inside, she discovered a folded piece of sheet music. Clara shook her head and opened the keyboard lid. If this was what being an old crackpot looked like, she might as well go with it.
Superb story. Interesting, atttention-holding. A book of them would sell. Might do a few more with the ladies and weave through others as your mood suits.
Thanks Dad. I’m glad you enjoyed it. There’s not much market for short stories, but they do teach you a lot about structure. Also Lottie and Clara wouldn’t leave my head until I finished it. 🙂
Absolutely brilliant! I want to live next door to Lottie & Clara (but would have to get my big toes fixed first). Sucked in by the first paragraph of your short story & spat out at the end, I rolled over on my study floor & then stood up & brushed myself down (that always seems to happen when I’ve been drawn into an intriguing piece of fiction). The old dears were fruitcakes for sure, yet something beyond madness permeated the length of this tale … something a little sinister wrapped up in a brown paper bag of feasibility. I will never get to the bottom of it all … but that’s what leaves me feeling so satisfied. Heidi – I just love the way you write. I SO do. Please write another one. Now.
I wasn’t sure this story would appeal to anyone besides me, but it just stuck in my head until I felt I had to work it out. How interesting to hear all you took away from it. Yes, I do believe there was madness, something sinister, and something vaguely feasible about it. I was going for all those things. Thank you so much for the encouragement, Peter. It really is wonderful.
You had me at “Lottie and Clara didn’t like the looks of the new neighbor.” Especially below that picture.
Loved it. Those old broads were full of both piss and vinegar, for sure.
Keep it up, Heidi. Would enjoy seeing more.
I knew this was going to be good when I read “Also, there was Lottie’s obsession with the new neighbor’s feet.” LOL!
I enjoyed taking a peek inside Clara and Lottie’s lives, but I especially enjoyed the pleasure of imagining myself in a hot, sunbaked, drought striken town. It sounds like heaven at the moment! 🙂
And “Mr. Whatshisname” sounds like my kind of guy–weird feet and all!
What an intriguing, fun little hop off from my dreary, ridiculously cold day!
Thanks so much for taking the time to read. I was worried no one would bother. These broads made me laugh, cause I’m pretty batty myself, methinks. Bwahahaha!
OK. Here’s my theory: that was one scary Garden Gnome and it was a good thing Lottie and Clara were no longer nubile and fertile! Fun story! Loved the connection between drought and music.
BTW, the woman on the right is one of my favorite actresses. She always played cranky housekeepers or neighbors.
I think you know by now wherever I am, the issue of garden gnomes cannot be far behind. 🙂 I’m so glad you enjoyed the story, it means a lot to me. Leave it to you with your vast knowledge of old movies and (delicious cuisine) to recognize the ladies.
Loved this!! I can just imagine having those two as neighbours!! What a scream….Brilliant 🙂
Louise, thanks so much for stopping by and taking the time to read the story. I’m so glad you got a kick out of it.
Wow. This is really, really good, from the age spots to the hobbit feet. Honestly, I thought it was fantastic.
(I myself would have looked at that photo and thought “Hemorrhoids!” You did so much better.)
Thanks so much for taking the time to read it, Auntie Kate. You must know by now how much I love your sense of humor, so it’s all the more flattering to hear you enjoyed it.
A. The photo set the story up perfectly. How could you have written it any other way?
B. Entire peace has great imagery and dialogue. Hand to God, Clara, hand to God is perfect. And cracks me up along with many other lines.
C. I always love stories about drought and the expectation of rain. Always so something magical hinted at and this is no different. Also had the feel of a bit of trickery going on, and I’m all about some trickery.
All in all I give you A for effort. Thanks for sharing.
I swear as I typed the “hand to god Clara” line I immediately thought of you. Somehow I just knew that one would make you laugh. Also, my own personal favorite is probably “Remember Breezy Carlson’s cat? The one with the hairball?” Cracked myself up on that one. I love it that you came by to read and that it appears I did not make an ass out of myself. Whew. You know what a big fan I am of your characters so it’s great to hear you enjoyed mine. BTW, I too am all about the trickery.
You won’t be so pleased I came be when you realize I have plagerized this story with the intent to publish. Thanks for the “inspiration” and helping me with my dream of being a published author.
In fact, hurry up with another story and then another. I think I can make a career of your work:)
Loved the humor and the fun dialogue in this story! 🙂 Sounded very British in my ears, and a little whimsical and odd and funny. And I’m with JA on the garden gnome theory. Scary green big toe! 🙂
How interesting that it sounded British. Maybe that post from last week about all those British children’s books influencing me really is true? Maybe you and JA are right, perhaps I was channeling my hatred for garden gnomes. 🙂 Thanks for stopping by Berit.
For me, it was the long slim fingers shading eyes.
Thank you so much for visiting my blog yesterday! I’m convinced, especially after reading this story, that we may just be the same person.
And you know, I almost cut that line a bunch of times. But I did like the description. Thank you Lisa, for taking the time to read the story. I’m so pleased to see people enjoying it. It was a strange slightly old fashioned yet slightly modern piece and I didn’t know if anyone would appreciate that kind of tale.
I did love reading your story. Wonderful in every way, including description and dialogue, and just laughed at the picture. You did a great job finding the words to fit the feel of the snapshot. Congrats!
Marisa, thank you for taking the time to read it. I’m so glad the whole thing hung together for you and that the story made you laugh. I really played around with that dialogue for a while to get the rhythm right and I’m pretty pleased with how it came out.
Great story. I suppose if it had been Sonata in G MINOR in stead of major, that it would’ve had an unhappy ending?
Thanks for reading it Scottie! I know you were probably teasing me, but I did actually go and listen to music in order to find a piece I thought felt right for the tone of the story. Kinda weird, right? Not that anyone else but me would hear it, but it helped me work out the ending somehow. Are you quite sure it’s happy? Or has Clara just succumbed to her madness?
I want some batty old relatives. All we’ve got is my mom. I’m terrible commenting on fictional stories but I really loved it. The imagery it conjured up was like Grey Gardens meets Golden Girls and I mean that in the best way possible.
Oh I’ve got batty comin’ out the yin yang. But Clara & Lottie are far battier. I think a combo of Grey Gardens & Golden Girls works beautifully. Add in a dash of Twin Peaks and we’re probably good to go. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it, Ilana. I alway like to hear your thoughts.
Read your story and enjoyed it…reminded me of a couple of old aunts I had (who I always thought were crazy)…good stuff.
Thanks so much for taking the time to read. Glad you enjoyed my batty pals. 🙂
I stumbled across your story because I googled “biddies” and hit “images”, then got curious as to what was on this page. Loved your story! Would love to read more about them. They reminded me of characters from Eudora Welty and Flannery O’Conner.
Thanks so much for stopping by, Laura. I’m honored by your comparison. I loved writing these characters. They were funny, batty, quirky and made me chuckle. Will have to think if there’s anything else I might do with them…